Wednesday, 25 May 2011

Writing about a special day!

The purpose of our writing was to describe a day we made special for another person. I chose to write about how I made mothers day special for my mother!


A loving person to be with that will always care for you no matter what. She looks after you and is a very big part of your life. One day to spend time looking after and caring for her. A day to remember.
Ping the pan went as eggs popped and splattered all over the place. Bacon sizzling around making an irresistible crispy edge around the outside. Toast popping everywhere ready to get served on the plate. As tropical juice bubbled away as I dropped two frozen ice cubes into it. Crumpets were flying into our plates getting drizzled with the richness of golden syrup. 
“Delivery!” I called, knocking on the hard wooden door. She sat up with her eyes looking sad and exhausted wanting to go back to sleep. Once she saw my gift though, she smiled with astonishment. Happiness can be seen all over her face. Her nose trickled with the sweet smell of hot crispy bacon as it fills up the air space in her room.
As I tried to sit down on the end of the bed without knocking anything over or making my mums foot a pancake. I had to sit down as light as a silky white feather falling on the ground. As I gave my mum her present, she teared the rapping paper of so delicately like as if it was a glass jar about to break. Sitting right in front of her was a bar of sweet caramelo milk chocolate.
Just before I dropped my head on the soft fluffy pillow next to my mother. I said “ Happy mothers day mum” Enjoy breakfast.
By christine
                               

13 comments:

  1. cool story Christine

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  2. Great story christine i hope your mum liked it!!! :)

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  3. I love the story christine expecially how you used lots of emotive words and deeper features very cool!

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  4. love the story christine expecially how you use such descriptive language and deeper features i felt like i was right there with you its very cool

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  5. Weldone Christine I really like this piece if writing I especialy like the deeper features you used. I bet your Mum really like it. She is really lucky!

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  6. this is a great story christine very awsome.

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  7. love the story christine! beautiful!(: hoped your mum liked it!(:

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  8. Man i wish there was a like putton! ohwell **liked**

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  9. i really liked your story christine

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  10. Christine, I LOVED your story your such a good writer!!!!

    Hope your mum liked it!!!


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  11. that story had great discriptive language-well done

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  12. I loved your story christine, loved the use of descriptive language and big emotive word's.

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  13. Cool story Christine, i liked your discriptive language :P

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